Strawberries513 Posted January 29, 2009 at 10:38 PM Report Posted January 29, 2009 at 10:38 PM I have to write a short essay on what I plan to do during college. My Chinese is not very good, so I had a lot of trouble with it. If someone would be willing to correct this for me (and help translate the part in english), I would GREATLY appreciate it. 我毕业以前，我一定要去留学。这个夏天我可能去中国学中文（如果我得到scholarship）。我也想去韩国学习因为我刚开始学韩语。我特别喜爱提遇到不同文化，各样各样的国家与人民。我理想的计划就是每个夏天去中国，而几个学期去韩国。 至于我的专业，现在的事东亚语言与文化，但是我想我will change my major to 语言学。因为我我喜欢所有的语言（和语言的结构、语法等等），而不只是中文。还有我觉得语言学专业内的课程更有趣。 总的来说，我的目标就是继续努力、得到好成绩、还有学到很多东西。我也想认识到很多朋友（尤其是从中国来的国际学生）而玩的开心。 Thanks for your help Quote
yersi Posted January 30, 2009 at 05:53 AM Report Posted January 30, 2009 at 05:53 AM (edited) Not bad at all, I did make some corrections and changes to it though. You seem to have a good grasp of Chinese grammar so I don't think I need to explain the changes in detail. A few things: 目标 is more like the English "target", it is used for short-term goals of limited scope. 至于 is used to mention something which is negated in the next sentence, e.g "as regards to my long-term plan, I don't have one". Also, I'm not a native speaker so you should wait and see if skylee et al trash me before you use this. 毕业以前，我一定要出国留学。今年夏天，如果拿到奖学金的话，我可能会去中国学中文。还有，因为我刚开始学韩语，我也想去韩国留学。 我喜欢不同文化，各种各样的国家和人民。 最理想的计划应该是每年夏天去中国，而去韩国几个学期。 我目前的主修为东亚语言，但是我想把主修换成语言学，因为我不但想学中文而已，而且对所有语言都感兴趣（它们的结构，语法等）。还有，我觉得语言学的课程比东亚语言更有趣。 总之，我打算继续努力，得到好成绩，学到各种不同的东西。我也希望能够跟很多来自不同国家的人交朋友，尤其是从中国来的留学生，跟他们玩得很开心。 Edited January 30, 2009 at 07:17 AM by yersi Quote
guoguy Posted January 30, 2009 at 11:40 PM Report Posted January 30, 2009 at 11:40 PM My corrections based on yersi's: 毕业以前，我打算出国留学("打算" is better)。今年夏天，如果拿到奖学金的话，我可能会去中国学中文。还有，因为刚开始学韩语，我也想去韩国留学。 我特别喜欢接触不同的文化，各样各样的国家与人民(liking contacting with sth. doesn't equal to liking sth.)。 我的计划("理想" is redundant)就是每年夏天去中国，而去韩国几个学期。 我目前的主修为东亚语言与文化，但是我想把它换成语言学，因为我不但想学中文，还对所有语言都感兴趣（它们的结构，语法等）。另外，我觉得语言学的课程比东亚语言的更有趣。 总之，我要继续努力，取得好成绩，学习各种东西。我也希望能够跟很多来自不同国家的人交朋友，尤其是从中国来的留学生，跟他们玩得很开心。 I found being a teacher is not an easy job from correcting this homework:lol:. It should make Strawberries513 happy although it's far from perfect:lol: Any decent comments are welcome. Quote
masterland Posted February 19, 2009 at 08:33 AM Report Posted February 19, 2009 at 08:33 AM guoguy's is great,i just wanna correct the last sentence 我也想结识很多朋友（尤其是从中国来的国际学生），跟他们玩的开心。 Quote
guoguy Posted February 20, 2009 at 04:29 AM Report Posted February 20, 2009 at 04:29 AM masterland, I accept your correction. I will say my correction is not very good from my current viewpoint. Quote
semantic nuance Posted February 23, 2009 at 07:51 AM Report Posted February 23, 2009 at 07:51 AM 我也希望能够跟很多来自不同国家的人交朋友，尤其是从中国来的留学生 這句話有點奇怪. 你是指來到中國的外國留學生? 還是中國的本地生呢? 如果是指前者的話, 那你原來的句子應該改為: 尤其是來到中國(學習)的留學生. Quote
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