querido Posted December 11, 2011 at 02:58 PM Report Posted December 11, 2011 at 02:58 PM 走长路走到海滩 浪花吻风吻天空 波浪敲土敲世界 站着别动站永远 耳目找你看不见 -朝阳 Quote
Cang Posted March 12, 2012 at 01:24 AM Report Posted March 12, 2012 at 01:24 AM About the title,"我的第二首诗"will be better 1 Quote
malanting Posted May 30, 2012 at 12:09 PM Report Posted May 30, 2012 at 12:09 PM 站永远 读不通 还有“耳目找你”是什么意思？ Quote
aurora-kid Posted September 13, 2012 at 11:43 AM Report Posted September 13, 2012 at 11:43 AM 同求“耳目找你”是什么意思？？ Quote
skylee Posted September 13, 2012 at 03:55 PM Report Posted September 13, 2012 at 03:55 PM 意思就是： 環顧四周尋覓你的身影 張耳傾聽可有你的聲音 PS - 大概不是“派出耳目去找你"吧。 Quote
New Members sylphsigh Posted May 14, 2013 at 05:40 AM New Members Report Posted May 14, 2013 at 05:40 AM 关于标题，我说一个问题 我相当于I，而不是MY，所以如果表示MY的意思，在我后面加个“的”比较好。 Quote
querido Posted April 14, 2014 at 03:34 PM Author Report Posted April 14, 2014 at 03:34 PM 谢谢你们。 对不起，我忘了我在Chinese Corner的短信。 ---走长路走到海滩 他去了到世界的边缘，世界的尽头 ---浪花吻风吻天空 我用了"天空"告诉你: 不是现实，是隐喻 ---波浪敲土敲世界 如果你不能猜测他是沮丧的，对不起。 ---站着别动站永远 在这儿他的生命来到它的"尽头"因为他不能找到她。 ---耳目找你看不见 他的耳子和他的眼睛不能找到她。 它是一个爱诗从一个美国人到一个中国人。明白吗？ 浪花的"花"是我的灵感。但中国太远。明白吗？ ( 不是真的故事) Quote
Vivi MENG Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:05 PM Report Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:05 PM 挺白话的，字数是对齐了，但是七言五句貌似没见过，是不是多写了一句？ Quote
querido Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:36 PM Author Report Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:36 PM 我不是真的诗人，不认识七*五，五*七。 Quote
Vivi MENG Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:41 PM Report Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:41 PM Don't you worry. It's beautiful. Just remind you that for ancient Chinese poetry, four line is enough, 8 line works. Yours are more modernized style I think. Enjoy it. Quote
querido Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:46 PM Author Report Posted April 14, 2014 at 04:46 PM 哎呀，你太善良的。 Quote
New Members ultranal Posted June 14, 2014 at 05:41 PM New Members Report Posted June 14, 2014 at 05:41 PM 向海滩兮路漫漫 风起浪兮浪吻天 震六合兮翻水土 长伫立兮空凝望 发空白兮不见君 The poem above is just for fun. Only when you have learnt Classical Chinese can you understand it.the format above is known as “骚体”（sāotǐ, a format which is used in 300bc classic《离骚》（Lísāo）written by 屈原Qūyuán） 语法上 只有一点要注意下 就是站着别动 这种说法是命令语气。可能换成“不动”好一点。 写成这样，也难能可贵了（难能可贵：尽管事情并没有做到最好，但是因为它很难，所以做到这样也非常值得表扬了。） 文学上就说一个方面 白话诗可以写得更加“散” 也就是不需要全部同字数。 I'm waiting for your new poem! Wish you become a real poetry! Quote
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