Help me Translate a Song to Chinese

[Sprachprofi]

Hey,

 

I know this really awesome song which already exists in German & French & Dutch and English translation (German lyrics and English translation, French lyrics, German song video, French song video, Dutch song & lyrics), it's the perfect song for leave-taking from a host and I'd love to be able to sing it for my Chinese hosts in the future. I tried to do a translation, but I admit it's beyond my level, especially to keep it singable. Here's my attempt, maybe you can correct & fill in - every little bit helps! Note that I'm going for a translation of the underlying meaning rather than each phrase. 

 

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Chorus:

晚安，朋友   Good night, friends (could I use 我兄弟 here to mean "my good friends"?)

该走的时候来了  It's time for me to go

我还要谈的事情  The things I'd still like to say

不多不长             Won't take long

呆最后一杯喝      The time of having a last glass

 

为日夜跟你们在一起，感谢   Thank you for the days and nights we spent together

为每一杯酒，为每一盘饭，   (For the chair at your table and the wine in my glass)

??? (For the plate you add for me,

???  as if nothing was more natural)

 

Chorus

 

感谢为我们聊天的时间   Thank you for the time we spent talking

为你的耐心 如果意见不同   For your patience when our opinions differed

为你从没问了我哪儿去哪儿来  For never asking where I go or where I come from

???  (For your door that is always open for me)

(Alternatively, based on the French, these two lines could be:  For not having tried to find out where I come from, nor where I go, nor when, nor why)

 

Chorus

 

为在你们的仁慈, 我感谢   Thanks for the kindness that lives at your place

为你从没问 ???    Thanks for never asking whether you'll profit [from having me stay]

可能是为此人人想像    Maybe it's because of this that people imagine

???  (That the light in your windows shines warmer than elsewhere)

 

Chorus

 

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Thank you for your help!

[Vivi MENG]

The blue sentences are my suggestion. You may find it is hard to understand 如此（such a) or 何方( where). I hope it will be helpful.

 

Chorus:

晚安，朋友   Good night, friends (could I use 我兄弟 here to mean "my good friends"?)

This is good enough, plz don't use 兄弟. It sounds a little bit impolite. 

该走的时候来了  It's time for me to go

It is fine

我还要谈的事情  The things I'd still like to say

我还有些话要说

不多不长             Won't take long

This is fine

呆最后一杯喝      The time of having a last glass

只要一杯酒的时间

为日夜跟你们在一起，感谢   Thank you for the days and nights we spent together

感谢和你们度过的每一个夜晚

为每一杯酒，为每一盘饭，   (For the chair at your table and the wine in my glass)

为每一杯酒，为每一顿饭

为每一双筷子，为如此体贴的关心(For the plate you add for me,

???  as if nothing was more natural)This is not direct translation, so plz don't match every word into English. I made this part up. ：）

 

Chorus

 

感谢为我们聊天的时间   Thank you for the time we spent talking

感谢我们一起聊天的时光

为你的耐心 如果意见不同   For your patience when our opinions differed

即使意见不同，你依然耐心

为你从没问了我哪儿去哪儿来  For never asking where I go or where I come from

你从不问我从那来，去向何方

???  (For your door that is always open for me)

总是敞开怀抱欢迎我

(Alternatively, based on the French, these two lines could be:  For not having tried to find out where I come from, nor where I go, nor when, nor why)

 

Chorus

 

为在你们的仁慈, 我感谢   Thanks for the kindness that lives at your place

感谢你们如此体贴好客

为你从没问 ???    Thanks for never asking whether you'll profit [from having me stay]

感谢你们如此无私待我

可能是为此人人想像    Maybe it's because of this that people imagine

可能是因为人们都在想

???  (That the light in your windows shines warmer than elsewhere)

你窗前的阳光要比任何地方都明亮

 

Chorus

[Sprachprofi]

Thanks! You solved my wording questions, though I'll have to see about making it fit the rhythm. 

 

I think you may have misunderstood one part:  "可能是因为人们都在想 你窗前的阳光要比任何地方都明亮"  

In German, the singer refers to the light that is inside the house, NOT the sunlight. So if you're standing outside a house on a cold autumn evening and you see the light shining through the windows, the friends' house's light looks particularly warm and inviting. Also, these two lines are too long to be sung. Can you help me find a shorter wording that still conveys the general idea?

 

非常感谢！

[Vivi MENG]

Oops, you are right. I made a mistake.

 

可能是为此人人想像    Maybe it's because of this that people imagine

可能因此人们都知道

???  (That the light in your windows shines warmer than elsewhere)

这里的灯光有家的温暖

 

How's this one?

[Sprachprofi]

Wow, I really like this! "家的温暖" - a warmth that makes you feel at home.

 

You're amazing, thank you so much!

[Vivi MENG]

You are welcome.