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[fanglu]

I am having trouble parsing the sentence 主要是围绕执行八项规定，阐述了党风廉政建设的治标与治本的关键措施方法。 The context is this:

据消息人士透露，王岐山前日下午约3时到会后，经过几分钟的介绍后，便脱稿讲话，他滔滔不绝地讲到4时10分左右，然后又用40分钟回答与会政协常委共8 条问题。主要是围绕执行八项规定，阐述了党风廉政建设的治标与治本的关键措施方法。除被问到“打老虎”外，会上亦有常委问到，会否不追究十八大以前的贪污 行为呢？王岐山坚定回应“不行”，称须一视同仁，贪污就是贪污，一定要彻查。他又说“现在人人都有手机 ”，而贪官最怕曝光，要发挥群众和媒体监督的正能量。

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I understand all the words, just not how they fit together. I think its the two 的s that have thrown me. Can anyone explain it? Are there two topics - 围绕执行八项规定 and 阐述了党风廉政建设的治标与治本的关键措施方法, or does 关键措施方法 refer to both? Or am I totally misunderstanding?

[Kenny同志]

This rewrite is not perfect but may be easier for you to understand.

 

据知情人透露，王岐山前日下午约3时到会，简短介绍后便开始长达近70分钟的长篇脱稿讲话，然后又用40分钟回答了与会政协常委共8 个问题。主要是以八项规定为根本，阐述了党风廉政问题治标治本之法。

[陳德聰]

I think you're segmenting it incorrectly.

 

The first part is saying what this person's main (主要) talking points are centred on (围绕): 执行八项规定.

 

After the comma, we see exactly what those talking points were, the person 阐述了 the 关键措施方法 for 党风廉政建设的治标与治本.

主要是围绕[执行八项规定]，阐述了[党风廉政建设的治标与治本]的关键措施方法]。

[fanglu]

Thanks a lot guys, that's really helpful.

[Kenny同志]

I recommend 明報 and 信報 and suggest you stay away from such trashy news articles. Out of the five sentences of the passage you quoted, four are poorly constructed.

 

据消息人士透露，王岐山前日下午约3时到会后，经过几分钟的介绍后，便脱稿讲话，他滔滔不绝地讲到4时10分左右，然后又用40分钟回答与会政协常委共8 条问题。

因連用兩個後字，句子非常彆扭。

 

 

主要是围绕执行八项规定，阐述了党风廉政建设的治标与治本的关键措施方法。

需治標治本的不是所謂建設，而是問題，所以，要麼說黨風廉政建設的關鍵措施，要么說黨風廉政問題治標治本的關鍵措施。此句還反映了共產中文的一個特點，就是喜歡故作精確，大用特用主要、關鍵、重要這些詞，叫人讀得反胃。

 

除被问到“打老虎”外，会上亦有常委问到，会否不追究十八大以前的贪污 行为呢？

被問及打老虎的是王岐山，不是那些常委。此句偷換主詞，與偷襲讀者無異。最好說：會上，常委除問及打老虎，還問了王會否追究十八大以前的貪污行為。

 

王岐山坚定回应“不行”，称须一视同仁，贪污就是贪污，一定要彻查。

應該是堅定回應說。

 

他又说“现在人人都有手机 ”，而贪官最怕曝光，要发挥群众和媒体监督的正能量。

[fanglu]

Thanks Kenny, your comments are interesting.

 

I also noticed the article was poorly written. I wouldn't be reading it by choice; translation of the article is a piece of homework for a translation course I'm taking.

[Kenny同志]

I see. Happy translating. : )