Is this right?

[belrvi]

It does not have to be same, but I would like to convey the meaning by trimming the Chinese sentences.

 

Thank you for drawing the vivid pictures of the school as a student, as an Asian, and as a woman. I learned that I have to prioritize my work as a student, and I need to overcome language barrier and culture as an Asian. And I learned that there's nothing I have to care about as a woman. This is absolutely mind-blowing, given that I used to work at XX and am now working for even more male-driven, manufacturing company.

 

感谢你的生動的畫面--做爲學生, 東方人, 和女子. 我知道我要優先化事做爲學生, 还有克服言語障壁和文化做爲東方人. 我又得知我不要结记做爲女子. 這是真好, 因为我在XX工作了和在男子占主導的家族企業工作.

[aone]

感谢你 - 作为一个学生、亚洲人及女人 - 所描绘的学校的生动画面。

我明白，作为一个学生，学习为首要任务；作为一个亚洲人，我需要克服语言以及文化上的障碍。 我也明白，作为一个女人，没有什么好担忧的。

 

这很让人兴奋，考虑到之前我曾经在XX工作，现在在（一家）男人更占主导地位的生产型企业工作。

 

F.Y.R