Need help translating important letter.

[Mattatx]

Hello all!! Thanks for taking the time to read or reply to this!

I am about to propose to the love of my life!!! Before I do this I want to get her parents blessing. She is Chinese and fluent in English and mandarin. Unfortunately her dad speaks almost no English and they live far away, so I wrote a letter. I think if it was in Chinese not only would it be easier on him to understand, hopefully it might show how sincere I am as well. Anyways, if you're able to translate it well, please help me out. Here's the letter:

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Wu, 9/24/15

First, I just wanted to thank you for making me feel so welcome in your home. The trust and generosity you have shown me on multiple occasions makes me feel like a part of your family and it truly means more to me than you will ever know!

You two have raised a beautiful, tremendously talented and respectable daughter in Lily. She makes my worst days better and my best days perfect. Lily has a kind heart and genuine soul. I have to make a point of recommending doing the things she loves because she will always insist on doing what I love, literally every time! Her smile alone changes my whole mood. Her wisdom keeps me focused and moving forward when life gets tough. And the kindness she has shown to my friends and family has won them all over and they have already accepted her as a part of our family.

Your daughter has my respect, my loyalty, my devotion and has won my heart for the rest of my life. I plan on being there for Lily when she succeeds and when she faces adversity. I promise to never give up on what we have built, to treat her with the love and respect she truly deserves and to honor your family and traditions as best as I can. I want nothing more than to see her happy for the rest of her life and it would mean the world to me if I had your blessings in marrying Lily Wu. I have never felt so strongly about anyone or anything in my life before, please do me the honor of allowing me to propose to her!

Kind regards,

Matt

[Kenny同志]

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Wu, 9/24/15 

 

Use 伯父伯母大人：

 

or

 

未來岳丈岳母大人：

[889]

You should be raising this with your girlfriend. Not just for the translation, but for her opinion on whether sending such a letter is a good idea, and if so, what approach it should take.

 

(When writing something that's to be translated, keep sentences short and avoid colloquialisms and flowery allusions/metaphors that just don't translate easily.)

[Lianne_Y]

But if he asks his girlfriend before he proposed to her, doesn´t that take away the point of this letter?

 

Does she have any friends you could ask?

[roddy]

I think when this has come up before, general opinion is to propose first, and then discuss with your girlfriend (fiancee, I suppose) the best way to ask for her parents blessing. 

 

Good luck!

[Shelley]

I agree with 889 about avoiding

colloquialisms and flowery allusions/metaphors   

 

They may get lost in translation or change meaning for the worse.

 

I also agree that you should propose to your GF first and then ask her opinion as how to proceed. Then she can also do the translation.

 

Are you planning on writing this yourself in characters?, if so what is your handwriting like? I don't think this is the sort of letter that should be typed.

 

Even though you might like to ask her parents first, in this situation I think it will be understandable if your deviate slightly from the normal order to ensure the letter to parents is up to the job. I think its important to get the letter right.

 

Hope it goes well.