Feedback on my Pronunciation, please!

[HashiriKata]

Hi,

It’s my turn to get some analysis . Whatever you say will be appreciated. The script is included below but you may like first to try without it and see if the reading is intelligible enough.

去逛公园，看见林荫道上一对青年男女手拉着手在散步，叫人好不羡慕。忽然发现姑娘的裙子后边拉链没拉上，很不好看。该不该告诉她，我犹豫着，游人越来越多，我替那姑娘着急，心一横就上前说了。男的却把眼一瞪：“这么大的公园，这么多的风景不看，却看人家姑娘的拉链，你无聊不无聊！”

Thanks,

[skylee]

I think you should pay attention to q as in 去/卻 (which sounds like j), k as in 看 (which sounds like g), t as in 她 (which sounds like d).

[Yuchi]

Aside from what skylee said, the following sound a bit off:

告

不 & 步 (same tone)

人

The rest sounded great, excellent job!

[HashiriKata]

Thanks skylee & yuchi,

Concrete comments like yours are very helpful, as they'll give me something to work on.

Cheers,