New Members BlackSpade Posted July 26, 2019 at 07:15 AM New Members Report Share Posted July 26, 2019 at 07:15 AM I've written myself a short essay given the words. I would like to check if it's grammatically correct? 我在练习我的书写。有谁可以帮我改一下我写了的短文妈？题目就是要全部使用下列的词语， 写一篇80字左右的短文。 元旦， 放松， 礼物， 表演， 善良 每年的元旦，人们都会觉得放松的缓步到寺庙祈福。然后，每一家人都会在美味的饭店聚会，一起吃饭。某某饭店有时会安排小表演给客人看。吃完了饭，父母会比较心地善良地买礼物给孩子。 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Publius Posted July 26, 2019 at 10:59 AM Report Share Posted July 26, 2019 at 10:59 AM 我在练习我的书写①写作。有谁可以帮我改一下我写了②的短文妈吗？题目就是要全部使用下列的词语， 写一篇80字左右的短文。 元旦， 放松， 礼物， 表演， 善良 每年的元旦，人们都会觉得放松的缓步③带着放松的心情到寺庙祈福。然后，每一家人都会在美味的④饭店聚会，一起吃饭。某某饭店有时会安排小表演给客人看。吃完了饭，父母会比较心地善良地⑤买礼物给孩子。 ① 书写 is for handwriting. ② 了 does not mean past tense. There is no tense in Chinese, only aspect. 了 is used to signify the completion of an action, which in the case of 我写的短文 is redundant. ③ Extremely awkward sentence and the wrong "de". Needs complete rewrite. ④ 美味 is used to describe food, not the place where food is served. ⑤ 心地善良 is seldom used adverbially, plus it's not the right word to describe parent-child relationship. It's more appropriate in a stranger-stranger context. 1 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
New Members BlackSpade Posted July 27, 2019 at 02:13 AM Author New Members Report Share Posted July 27, 2019 at 02:13 AM Ok. Thanks for your suggestions and correcting the sentences. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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